Thinking about Facebook it is difficult to imagine how this site can save someone’s life. An English boy, aged sixteen, was chatting with a girl in the United States. He told her that he wanted to commit suicide by taking a drugs overdose. The American girl told her mother about this situation and her mother called the police. They were able to track the boy down by calling the White House and the British Embassy. The police found the boy after taking the overdose, but despite the overdose he was still conscious. They took him to the hospital and he recovered well. The use of Facebook saved his life.
Hi Julia,
ReplyDeleteYour blog looks good. Everything seems to be as it should be - I can therefore only comment on the writing itself. I'll pick two posts to do that, including this one. My comments are in [brackets]. There is only a minor problem with verb tenses - you overuse the present perfect somewhat (where the simple past is needed). No big problem.
Thinking about Facebook it is difficult to imagine how this site can save someone’s life. An English boy[,] aged sixteen[,] was chatting with a girl in the United States. He told her that he wanted to commit suicide by taking a drugs overdose. The American girl told her mother about this situation and her mother called the police. They were able to track the boy down by calling the White House and the British Embassy. The police [-]found the boy after taking the overdose, but [-] he was still conscious. They took him to [-]hospital and he [made a full recovery]. The use of Facebook [-]saved his life.